The glimmer of hope in her eyes was startling and surprising, a sparkle I had longed to see for such a long time.
There she was, filled with positive thoughts, young and innocent, expecting the world to bend to her needs, not in a selfish way, but in a comforting sense.
She still believed, even after all that she had been through, that nothing was lost, no battles could not be won, and the good would always prevail.
Pushing the tears that welled inside of me, those darn tears, that I, a man of medicine should never show my patients, back, I took a deep breath.
Armed with many years of training, but no ability to give a longer live to this sweet little girl, I entered the room – the bearer of bad news.
Copyright Claudia H. Blanton 2014
This flash fiction was inspired the Five Sentence Flash Prompt “Glitter”.
A really well told story of a tragic, heartbreaking, situation.
One thing – your last line (which is great and really kicks the story home) has a misspelling (‘bearer’ not ‘barer’). I would not normally mention minor typos like this, but given its placement in that last sentence that is *so important* to this piece, the mistake distracts from your powerful ending.
Cheers
KT
thank you, I will fix that – I very much welcome it, when someone points out mistakes, thank you for that!